These Emotions
One night I was woken up by a terrible sound. A flash of light filled the dark sky,
as I try to sleep the thunder boomed across the sky in a matter of a moment. I yelped
and ran into my mum and dads room but……... they were not there. I tried calling
them…..no one answered. BOOM! The thunder was as loud as a explosion scaring
me more. I heard a sound tapping onto the window, as I sat in silence and in fear.
Sounds came everywhere; creaking, the chair rocking and a static noise as I hugged
myself.
as I try to sleep the thunder boomed across the sky in a matter of a moment. I yelped
and ran into my mum and dads room but……... they were not there. I tried calling
them…..no one answered. BOOM! The thunder was as loud as a explosion scaring
me more. I heard a sound tapping onto the window, as I sat in silence and in fear.
Sounds came everywhere; creaking, the chair rocking and a static noise as I hugged
myself.
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I heard my breath Loud and clear, as I cautiously walked in. I couldn’t see a thing
my heart pounded fast. I got onto my knees and began navigating my way inside.
THUMP! My body couldn’t move I stared straight ahead not knowing what to do.
I heard a whisper 1.2.3….SURPRISE! My beloved Mother, father, sisters and my
brothers sung happy birthday. I tried speaking but I couldn’t. As tears ran down my
cheek I hugged my family, before I said “I just turned fourteen years old!”.
my heart pounded fast. I got onto my knees and began navigating my way inside.
THUMP! My body couldn’t move I stared straight ahead not knowing what to do.
I heard a whisper 1.2.3….SURPRISE! My beloved Mother, father, sisters and my
brothers sung happy birthday. I tried speaking but I couldn’t. As tears ran down my
cheek I hugged my family, before I said “I just turned fourteen years old!”.
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I hopped onto the bed and giggled. The sun was high in the sky; then I woke up, as
I threw my bed sheets away and rushed into the shower and said “this is going to be
a great day!”. I Did my routine that I usually do in the morning, before leaving my
house. I threw my hands up in the air “This is going to be amazing me and my friend
having to attend different class and having different teachers it's like living in a
whole new world; it’s going to be fun. As I entered the school gates, I had the biggest
smile that I could ever have.
I threw my bed sheets away and rushed into the shower and said “this is going to be
a great day!”. I Did my routine that I usually do in the morning, before leaving my
house. I threw my hands up in the air “This is going to be amazing me and my friend
having to attend different class and having different teachers it's like living in a
whole new world; it’s going to be fun. As I entered the school gates, I had the biggest
smile that I could ever have.
This week we had to write paragraphs about what emotions we are trying to infer or imply without exactly telling you; show not tell. Anyways how was my punctuations? Did I use the semicolon correctly? give me feedback so I can fix my mistake and also improve them in the future.
Was it easy? - yes
What was difficult? - I say It wasn't because of describing it
What I should do to Improve at least - my Punctuation
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